HOW TO GET INTO COLLEGE
Crafting Your Personal Statement Photo by Amanda Cheromiah
You may be thinking that your grades or test scores mean everything in a college application. While they are an important part of your application, so is your personal statement or essay. Many colleges have this writing requirement in order to be considered for admission. Scholarships emphasize written statements or short answer questions to find deserving students. Be sure to follow the directions of the essay: • Keep within the word or page limit. The goal is to get your ideas across, but be concise with your content. • Answer the questions. After writing your essay, make sure you answer the questions to the best of your ability. • Proofread your essay. An extra pair of eyes over an essay you have read 10, 20, or 100 times can make all the difference. Colleges are excited to hear from students that have a unique story to share. They want to know how your lifestyle and viewpoints can impact and make a difference on their college campus. If you are uncomfortable to talk about yourself this can be a difficult task, but it is important to advocate for yourself and express important parts of yourself. Brainstorm your personal statement with significant life events.
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Culture as Strength This goes beyond where you come from and traditions, and can express your values and interests.
Influence of Community Your experiences with your community can help tell your story. Whether it means being back home on the rez, dancing and singing in ceremonies, or being involved in your community in other ways, these experiences and people have shaped you.
Let Your Brilliance Shine Self-identifying as Oglala Lakota, a good writer, and a grandson all demonstrate who you are and how you will carry yourself in college. On the next page is an essay that expresses all these points.
They want to know how your lifestyle and viewpoints can impact and make a difference on their college campus.
Sample Personal Statement Start with a “hook” to catch the reader.
Simple story about who you are.
Be thoughtful in how you structure your essay. This person is telling a story that builds to her main point. Keep within the word count. This essay is 474 words. What would you cut if the limit was 300?
My moccasins are lightly padding on the floor as I walk to my English class. I feel the heavy turquoise necklace around my neck as I grip the note cards against my chest. I take a couple of deep breaths before I reach the handle. I open the door to see the room is packed. All eyes are staring at my ribbon skirt, the glittering beads on my feet, and the enormous turquoise earrings that hang from my ears. Mrs. Novak gives me a huge smile and I begin the story of four generations. My great-grandmother got married when she was fifteen. She raised ten children. All of them were taken away around their tenth birthday and I learned that it was hard for her to understand when strangers came and told her that it was the law that her kids went to school. She only speaks Navajo and it was alienating when her sons and daughters spoke English. My grandmother recalls this time differently. She remembers her mother putting her on a bus with a suitcase and her entering a classroom where she did not know the language. Her bed was in a room with 20 other girls she did not know. She eventually began to speak English, but the staff and teachers never cared if her coat ripped or when she got sick.
Define yourself in the essay.
My mom remembers early mornings where she fell asleep on the hour bus ride to school. She stuck with her fellow Native friends and never spoke up in class. When she told her counselor about her college goals, they didn’t take her seriously. She was the only one of her group of friends to go to college. Today as I stand before this class, I am literally wearing my heritage on my sleeve: a ribbon skirt from my father’s Lakota heritage and the turquoise from my mother’s Navajo land. I am so grateful to receive an education and support from this school. Mrs. Novak asked me to share why I decided to become a teacher. Native youth today have a high dropout rate because of the lack of mentors, the lack of support systems, and they carry the history of trauma from people before them. I, too, will carry the history of my ancestors like my great-grandmother, my grandmother, and mother. As a teacher I want to not just teach, but to inspire the next generation and emphasize that I believe in them.
Who inspires you and why?
Connect your goals with your desire to get an education.
Thanks to people like Mrs. Novak, I want to change the way Native youth approach education. Native students have dreams and ambitions to help them overcome obstacles, maintain their resiliency, and work for a better life. I believe that if I can educate the youth of my tribe, they will work hard and earn a diploma. They are capable...like me.
Highlight values that are important to you like family, education, and culture.
Show, rather than tell. This essay has an underlying element of overcoming public speaking and self-advocacy by setting the scene with a speech.
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